Hi all,
Looking forward to catching up. Sorry I missed the last meeting (and hope Darren passed on my apologies - I was sick).
Following a manuscript assessment and beta reader feedback, I've rewritten my opening chapters (and am working through various rewrites throughout the novel more generally). Would appreciate your feedback on the new opening.
See you soon (in person?! - if we can get the booking).
Cheers, Kane
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Hi Kane,
Really cool world you’ve created with so much going on and so many secrets to be unveiled.
Loved the names (even if I won’t attempt to say them out loud), your ideas, and the purposefulness with which you’ve filled these first two chapters with world and character building.
My comments are attached. Looking forward to tomorrow.
Best,
Rafe
Really cool world you’ve created with so much going on and so many secrets to be unveiled.
Loved the names (even if I won’t attempt to say them out loud), your ideas, and the purposefulness with which you’ve filled these first two chapters with world and character building.
My comments are attached. Looking forward to tomorrow.
Best,
Rafe
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Hi Kane,
Enjoyed the start, some interesting concepts. Liked the blindfolded duel and the final page concept from the previous life.
See you tomorrow
Enjoyed the start, some interesting concepts. Liked the blindfolded duel and the final page concept from the previous life.
See you tomorrow
Regards,
Darren
"The poop was me... Sorry. In my defence, I've never had the poop talk before" - Jaime
"I am no longer engaging in the mermaid poop conversation" - Karin
Darren
"The poop was me... Sorry. In my defence, I've never had the poop talk before" - Jaime
"I am no longer engaging in the mermaid poop conversation" - Karin
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Hi Kane,
Good revisions, makes the whole stronger despite some small sacrifices.
More comments in the text.
Talk soon!
Bron
Good revisions, makes the whole stronger despite some small sacrifices.
More comments in the text.
Talk soon!
Bron
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Hey Kane,
I’m just adding my comments.
I’m just adding my comments.
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